Yes, I have tidied up a little. Took out about 3K of words; incomplete thoughts and added a couple of thousand of probably the same. Just to give you an idea of how this bit is going.
I will probably post a chunk later, if I can make it decent.
“You seem selected for something, Kyle?”
“If I am, I don’t know what. I went to find some fish and Roc eggs; instead I find a girl lying by the road and then, when I get her to the village they attack me. I head back to the fish pens and nothing; then a Roc bonds with me and Tare wants me to get her pregnant. Now I have no fish; no Roc eggs and something in my mind whether I like it or not.”
“I always keep a few fish but I’ll tell the Women’s Committee their yours and they can carry them back. Follow the Cat when he gets back, he’s watching the women at the moment.”
Kyle looked up as he heard another shout and saw Mari pointing back into the trees, it sounded like, “go, Kyle!”
Kyle didn’t wait for the women to arrive but ran for the trees with the Cat overtaking him and barely made it before the women arrive with four men carrying a stretcher and a body on it.